Your paper is constructed very well! I would say you could work on breaking some sentences down instead of having longer run on sentences. Also, your analysis and data presentation was very thorough. I don't think you need to change anything about the organization but you could add a few interviews. Other than that, it is very concise and clear.
I think your paper overall was well put together and got its meaning across. I feel as though you could work on either shortening some sentences, or separating it into two sentences. There was also a bit of redundancy in some of the words and phrases you used. Your data was clearly laid out and printing in color made it much easier to understand. Additionally, you should avoid using personal pronouns such as "my" and "I", as a research paper should be more objective. As far as I understand APA formatting, you did it pretty well. I believe the first sentence in your abstract is written incorrectly as it is incoherent. You did a good job analyzing the results and tying them back to your original question. I would just focus on sentence structure and word choice.
Your paper is constructed very well! I would say you could work on breaking some sentences down instead of having longer run on sentences. Also, your analysis and data presentation was very thorough. I don't think you need to change anything about the organization but you could add a few interviews. Other than that, it is very concise and clear.
ReplyDeleteI think your paper overall was well put together and got its meaning across. I feel as though you could work on either shortening some sentences, or separating it into two sentences. There was also a bit of redundancy in some of the words and phrases you used. Your data was clearly laid out and printing in color made it much easier to understand. Additionally, you should avoid using personal pronouns such as "my" and "I", as a research paper should be more objective. As far as I understand APA formatting, you did it pretty well. I believe the first sentence in your abstract is written incorrectly as it is incoherent. You did a good job analyzing the results and tying them back to your original question. I would just focus on sentence structure and word choice.
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